The video is analysing how the students have effectively written a general statement and signpost sentence in the introduction and then how they have written their main paragraphs well using topic sentences and linking words.
They also write good clear paragraphs because they have good ideas which they develop well by giving examples or reasons or results.
This video looks at two examples of a story for the First for Schools. The first story is a weaker answer and the second is a stronger answer.
The tutorial focuses on writing a realistic and believable story and considers some vocabulary that you can introduce in your text which will make your writing more interesting. It also looks at using adverbs and direct speech to make your writing more exciting.